2018年托福考试独立写作范文（15）

　　年轻人类题目：

　　Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.

　　范文(年轻人类)：

　　With the development of society, people nowadays are living in a relatively complete mechanism, yet some tiny but important aspects, which may be overlooked, need to be ameliorated by discussion. Some people may argue that youth seems to have no influence on current society. However, in my opinion, youth should still be taken into consideration when determining the future of the society in the long time run. My view point is based on the following reasons and examples.

　　Firstly, young people play a major role in improving the development of current society. For one thing, there are some special tasks, which are not only inevitable in its area but also needs high requirements of physical condition and cannot be accomplished by older people. For instance, when enrolling pilots, no matter for military affairs or civil aviation, it is strict with requirements of physical condition like eyesight and height, which older people may not satisfy. For another, young people also promote economic increase to some degree. Many enterprises aim at expanding the market of youth by developing more products, which largely increase the purchasing power of youth. And this method achieves big success especially in the electronic market.

　　Additionally, young people directly guide future direction of our society nowadays. As youth possesses creativity coming up with ideas, which sometimes seem to be ridiculous, it's entirely possible that one of those "wired idea" becomes breakthrough in a specific area. For instance, Steve Jobs, who has been described as the "Father of the Digital Revolution", once said he would like to invent a smartphone containing only one key. It was such a brave and creative idea and cannot be realized at that time. However, after continuously research, iPhone, which guides a new period of communication, came out.

　　Admittedly, despite older people are more experienced than youth, and are more possible to come up with more feasible and reasonable ideas when confronting difficulties, youth represents creativity, bravery and confidence, which are all inevitable during the process of the development of the society. Moreover, experience is based on accumulation of time and lessons, as older people also have no experience when they were young. Hence, blindly overlooking the important influence of youth, will finally lead to unexpected negative consequences.

　　Overall, youth represents the future of the society, and has potential influence to the society from the aspect of future development. Young people not only plays an important role, but also guides the future direction of our society.

　　范文所涉及词汇讲解(年轻人类)

　　with the development of 随着…的发展

　　mechanism机制

　　overlooked被忽视的

　　be ameliorated by被…改善

　　have influence on对…的影响

　　current society当今社会

　　take into consideration把…列入考虑之内

　　in the long time run在长期内

　　high requirement高要求

　　physical condition 身体状况

　　be accomplished by 被…完成

　　pilot飞行员

　　no matter for无论对…

　　military affair军事事件

　　civil aviation民用航空

　　be strict with对…严格要求

　　eyesight视力

　　expand market扩大市场

　　purchase power购买能力

　　achieve big success获得巨大的成功

　　electronic market电子市场

　　guide future direction指导未来方向

　　creativity创造力

　　come up with想出…

　　ridiculous荒谬的

　　breakthrough突破

　　be described as被描述为…

　　smartphone智能手机

　　one key一个按键

　　brave and creative idea勇敢和创造性的想法

　　guide 指引

　　feasible可行的

　　confront difficulty面对困难

　　bravery and confidence勇气和信心

　　accumulation积累

　　lead to unexpected negative consequence导致意想不到的负面后果

　　范文分析(年轻人类)

　　文章组织结构

　　本文总分论点间逻辑严谨，是典型的五段式论文。总观点出现在首段第三句，即作者认为自己赞同青年人对社会发展的决策是有影响力的。随后，作者用了两个主体段和一个让步段对总观点进行了论证。第一个分论点是青年在改善当今社会发展中起到主要作用。第二个分论点是青年直接指引着社会未来的方向。

　　论点细节展开

　　本文的两个主体段展开完全符合托福独立写作评分要求，按照主题句+说理论证+细节举例的结构进行分论点的展开。第一个主体段的细节举例是，比如招聘飞行员的时候，对身体状况要求非常严格，如视力和身高。而年长者可能不满足这些条件。第二个主体段的细节举例是，比如乔布斯想要发明一种只有一个按键的智能手机。这是一个勇敢且创新的想法，在当时不能被实现。然而经过他的不懈研究，一种新的沟通工具，iphone问世。

　　语言运用质量

　　本文词汇多样，句式多变。具体的好词好句表达，参见Language Use中的表达并进行背诵。