商务英语高级写作范文

　　Selected staff of your company are to receive aquestionnaire requesting feedback on their viewsabout the company. Use the following notice to writea letter to the selected members of staff who willreceive the questionnaire. You should state thepurpose of issuing the questionnaire, then say how staff opinions count. Your letter shouldalso include the information in the notice below.

　　IT'S YOUR OPINION THAT COUNTS EVEN IF YOU GAVE IT LAST TIME

　　· Talkback Two is on its way with July pay-slips.

　　· Since Talkback One, staff views have found their way into action plans throughout thecompany.

　　· Things are happening as a result of your feedback.

　　· There is to be greater emphasis on career development. This was already in the ipeline, butthe Talkback results confirmed this was definitely needed.

　　· If you receive a questionnaire, please take time to complete it. It should take less than halfan hour.

　　Everyone's opinion counts!

　　Please give yours! TALKBACK TWO

　　Be constructive in your suggestions!

　　Start your letter with Dear Staff Member,

　　Note: Since you start with the salutation, the parts of the letter above it, such as the addressand date, are omitted for you, but you still have to make sure that the rest of the letter followsthe letter format properly.

　　You should write about 150 words. Write the answer on your answer sheet.

　　参考范文及评分标准

　　Dear Member of Staff

　　Following our successful questionnaire Talkback One, we are beginning our Talkback Two, auseful means to give management valuable feedback on your views about our company. Youwin receive it together with your July payslip.

　　A number of action plans have been worked Out since Talkback One. An example is thecompany giving greater emphasis to career development. The Talkback results confirmed thiswas definitely needed. As a result, a new career development programme came into practice inMay (even though this was already envisaged some time ago). The company is giving you achance to have your say. Take it! Confidentiality is guaranteed. The questionnaire does notrequire your name. All opinions count. Please make sure you give yours, even if you gave it lasttime.

　　If you receive a questionnaire, please take time to complete it - it should take no more thanhalf an hour. Please bear in mind that the greater the response the more representative theresults will be. These results it is hoped will enable changes to be made that will ultimatelybenefit you in the long term!

　　We look forward to your constructive suggestions.

　　Yours Faithfully

　　Signature

　　Full name

　　Award the maximum amount of 20 points as follows,

　　·Check that all the relevant details are included. (10 points)

　　·Cheek that the purpose of issuing the questionnaire is given in the first paragraph , (2points)

　　·Check that the information is organized logically. (2 points)

　　·Check that the language is formal enough and the style is suitable. (2 points)

　　·Check that the closing parts are correct ('Yours faithfully' , signature and full name in capitalletters). (l point)

　　·Check the layout of the letter, use of paragraphs, spacing, position of opening and closingexpressions. (1 point)

　　·Cheek that the language used is appropriate and accurate. (2 points)