2014年商务英语考试初级写作例文9

　　From: office Manager

　　To: all staff

　　Subject: upgarde of computer system

　　As our computer system need to be upgraded, we have arranged the contarctors to upgrade the them [1]on Wedesday. On that day all computers should be shutted down for a full day, so you need arrange some alternative work for that day.

　　导师修改意见：

　　[1]第一: 不要重复使用前面已经用过的词;第二：指代错误，前面说的system 是单数，怎么到这里变成了them? 合成一句：as we have arranged the contractor to upgrade our computer system.

　　本期作文题目：

　　Formulate a smoking policy for your office which is fair to both smokers and nonsmokers. Write a 40-50 word memo informing all staff of the policy.

　　提示：

　　我们需要确定，如果我是公司职员，我要在这篇memo中获得什么信息?是不是要知道：

　　1.新的吸烟政策从什么时候开始;

　　2.吸烟区划定在什么地方?

　　TO: All Employees

　　FROM: CEO, Willan Smith

　　SUBJECT: NEW SMOKING POLICY

　　For all the employees, especially smokers,[1] plz be aware that our company's new smoking policy has been formulated as follow: A main smoking area's going to be restricted before Next MONDAY[2], anyone is not allowed to smoker in non-smoking zone even in the washing room.[3]

　　Plz target the smoking and non-smoking area and stick to the company's new policy.[4]

　　Thx.

　　导师指导：

　　[1]去掉，抬头已经写过给所有的员工，所以直接从正文开始就行了，费这个事干什么?

　　[2]时间不确切，最好是 from next Monday. Before 这个期限是什么时候?如果不能给出确切信息，就不要说，还不如换成具体的吸烟区域更好: be restricted to the room next to the toilet.

　　[3]你经常在洗手间吸烟吗?或者你们公司有这样的同事?把这句话去掉。

　　[4]添加：to ensure that it is fair to all of you.